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looking through windows, into your eyes,
into your soul, where sorrow lies,
searching for peace, finding death,
nothing to hold onto, nothing left,
in the end, it all ends the same,
losing a soul, no-ones to blame,
what happens happens, you cant regret,
just let it go, try and forget,
I'm letting you go, but keep me close,
let me stay where no one knows,
somewhere in your mind, where memories lie,
leave me there, when memories die,
im leaving now, i love you too much,
please forgive me, I've had enough...
into your soul, where sorrow lies,
searching for peace, finding death,
nothing to hold onto, nothing left,
in the end, it all ends the same,
losing a soul, no-ones to blame,
what happens happens, you cant regret,
just let it go, try and forget,
I'm letting you go, but keep me close,
let me stay where no one knows,
somewhere in your mind, where memories lie,
leave me there, when memories die,
im leaving now, i love you too much,
please forgive me, I've had enough...
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This poem is a it emo, i admit, but yeh...
hope u enjoy it ^^
hope u enjoy it ^^
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i think that the poem is good.
yet there are things that could make it better.
"ur" at the begging is unnecessary unless you are gooing to do all of the your"s like that.
separate ideals into stanzas. it will allow for better flow and understanding.
make sure you capitalize the beginnig of the lines: it adds to the visual part of poetry.
other than these errors i think that the poem is really good.
yet there are things that could make it better.
"ur" at the begging is unnecessary unless you are gooing to do all of the your"s like that.
separate ideals into stanzas. it will allow for better flow and understanding.
make sure you capitalize the beginnig of the lines: it adds to the visual part of poetry.
other than these errors i think that the poem is really good.